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Monday 13 August 2012

What If? Fairytale Madness Blogfest

Today I'm partcipating the What If? Fairytale Madness Blogfest. Special thanks to judges: Cassie MaeMorgan ShamyMark Koopmans, and Leigh Covington. My entry is for Team Plot Twists. Best of luck to everyone entering stories in this blogfest.


Peter Pan No More

Peter Pan sat in the mess hall shackled. It had been a month since he and The Lost Boys were captured. He was locked in a cell, they were taken down below. Anytime he saw them, he ached.

He refused to eat as Captain Hook walked in. "Son!" he lit up upon seeing Peter.

The pirates burst out laughing when Peter recoiled. "Stop calling me that."

Captain Hook walked up to him. "Please understand that everything I've done was for you Edgar Hook."

Peter refused to acknowledge him. Every time he recalled the truth he felt sick. Both once lived in another world. They were Amelia, Carter and Edgar Hook. They were very close, even after Amelia died of pneumonia. But everything changed during an Easter Egg Hunt. Edgar saw a portal and tripped. Carter went after him and screamed upon seeing Edgar unconscious. Tiger Lily found then and they went to her village.

But during a pirate attack Hook was captured and spent years on their ship. He eventually broke free and took over by killing the former captain. But by then Edgar had become Peter Pan and had no memory of his past. Filled with bitterness Hook waged war against Neverland and plundered innocents all the while plotting to get his son back. Now he'd succeeded.

Peter finally looked at Hook's hopeful face. The captain regularly bombarded him with stories and photos. And despite no recollection Peter knew one thing. The Carter Hook described to him died long ago. Even though Hook let Tiger Lily and Tinkerbell go. He left The Lost Boys to the mercy of lecherous pirates.

"I waited thirty years for you. We can start a new life."

Peter glared. "Never."

Hook grabbed him by his shirt. "Then you and your friends will rot here."

 So there you have it. My entry in this blogfest. Let me know what you think.

P.S. - For a chance to win an ebook of The Hands of Time click here. Winner Announced August 17, so there's still time to enter.

23 comments:

  1. He was Hook's son? Nice twist. Sucks to be Peter right now though.

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  2. Love the twist, really great concept about Hook and Peter being father and son, and originally from another world. :)

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  3. WOW! Great plot twist!
    I like how you show Hook's temper and cruelty in the end, showing us how he's not the man he once was. And great choice with Peter Pan! :)
    Thanks for being part of the fest! This is awesome!

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  4. Wonderful twist, Sheena-kay! I did NOT see that one coming.

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  5. Visiting from the blog fest.
    A great and unexpected twist to the popular Peter Pan story...

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  6. Interesting. It fits, actuallly, although I hadn't thought of it before. It gives Hook a reason for his actions.

    Lauren
    Lauren-ritz.blogspot.com

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  7. Interesting! I've never thought of Pan and Hook being father and son, but it's a great twist! :D

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  8. That's a great twist-and I love Peter Pan. Well done.

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  9. Noooo, Peter! I feel your pain! Love the story and love this twist!

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  10. Wow! Dark! Great twist to the story, and well written, too!

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  11. Ooh, Hook as Peter's father, nice!

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  12. Tinker bell will save them! Great twist :)

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  13. Ha! What a great twist and the first post I've seen using Peter Pan - awesome :)

    Thanks for participating, and good luck to you, too :)

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  14. great stuff, wen you started w/ peter, thought you might give us a sample of zombies!
    but this was great too =)

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  15. love this twist!!! Hook and Peter, flesh and blood. Totally awesome

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  16. I was thinking the same thing as Tara :) Love Hook being his dad, great twist!

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  17. LOVE THIS!!!!!! Seriuosly so cool.

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  18. My fav so far. Very original. Well done!

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  19. What a great twist!! I definitely would NEVER have thought of this. Awesome job :)

    Samantha
    Writing Through College

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  20. This is awesome! It's a great explanation of the dynamic between Peter and Hook. Kind of reminded me of Star Wars, too - y'know, "I am your father, Luke." :D

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  21. Hi, Sheena,

    OVer from the blogfest... nice to meet you.

    Great twist here. Who'd of thought Captain Hook is Peter Pan's father.

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  22. Reminded me of Star Wars. Great twist!

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